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The topic of this essay was hard to read. I had heard of experiences before in stalking cases in which the police had no power to act, but even as a woman I still hadn’t understood or realized the extent to which harassment across the internet/phone/mail would affect someone. The more and more assigned readings we do, the more I see how we cover up social inequalities. Anyone can be exposed to adversity, but now I really see how I, and other females around me, may face direct discrimination in the future. Amanda Hess never truly answers her question of “why women aren’t welcome on the internet,” but she does address how women aren’t welcome by documenting a variety of experiences from various victims. Sadly, the anonymity of the internet brings people to be more daring and vocal about their opinions, probably knowing that they aren’t likely to be traced. Similarly, even if they are traced that they won’t face charges because what they are doing is not actually considered a criminal ...

The purpose of Danah Boyd’s Inequality: Can Social Media Resolve Social Divisions? is to argue and inform others about the negative repercussions of social media. Everyone sees social media as a huge connector that levels the field and breaks the ties of social division. Technology like the internet and telegraph were thought to be a great medium for communication and to help connect people of different backgrounds and geological locations, but instead Boyd argues against social media uniting forces and resolving social divisions. She provides a lot of examples about how teenagers / high schoolers know about the social divisions that exist in their communities yet accept them because that is what is easiest, as well as including a lot of evidence where people thought they were open-minded and diverse, but then realized they aren’t as diverse in their relations after talking with Boyd. It is an inquiry essay in that Boyd wants to inquire what exactly is going on with diversity a...

Hi, I was wondering if I could run a few ideas by you. I am a very indecisive person and was having trouble sticking to one thing for this assignment because I am a person that always thinks and weighs pros and cons before they act. I have not submitted a proper blog post on time because new ideas keep coming into my head and I keep changing my mind. Can I try to show you my thought process of topics and see where I go with it after discussing it with you? 1) Astronomy Club: I started with astronomy club because I have not gone yet, but I will go this Thursday.  The only issue is that it meets biweekly at most and therefore does not meet frequently enough. I’d only have like one maybe two meetings. 2) Office Hours: I thought about office hours because I haven’t gone to any yet and I have preconceptions but it is not a discussed topic. 3) Stop Cussing/Being Negative: Next I went to “stop cussing” but I did not know how much I could write about that and it was too broad and le...

Consider the Lobster by David Foster Wallace was a very interesting piece of writing. Having never even tasted lobsters before, I learned a lot about them through the information included in this article. I had never even thought about how the process of preparing lobsters could be as big of an ethics issue as slaughter houses and cramped chicken houses. At the beginning, Wallace introduces the assigned subject of this article: the 2003 Maine Lobster Festival. Wallace goes off on a lot of tangents throughout the writing and follows them – he even makes use of footnotes when he has excessively long tangents that would otherwise confused the reader or get in the way of the flow of his story. Even though these tangents are related to his subject of lobsters they often hold different types of information. Wallace is sure to include a lot of details, descriptions, and definitions. He starts this article strong with thorough background information of lobsters in general. Then, he includes...

Although the “Unitasker” went in each of Huxley’s 3 directions, there were never any concrete moments where you felt he was moving directly in a single direction. In the beginning, when the author introduced his topic he typically stayed in the direction towards the personal, the autobiographical, and inner experience, but as his writing progressed it was pretty sporadic. I’d say that the essay was much more like a conversation. He begins the essay with personal anecdotes and describes a setting, giving the readers context about where he is coming from and what he is trying to do. For his experiment, the author researched a lot about different theories involving his coined term “unitasking,” or focusing on one thing at a time and living in the now in order to help him with his experiment. He even goes as far as contacting and meeting with people who would most likely be the best at unitasking / limiting distractions and errors and proceeds to take their advice. He also asks questions ...

I thought that your paper was very well written and easy to read. You used a lot of transitions, good vocabulary, and varied sentence structure, which helped the paper flow and kept it interesting. I liked how you explained rhetoric in the first paragraph – but it was kind of weird how you said “_____, also known as pathos” at the end of your essay after using pathos throughout your writing. I liked how you briefly but thoroughly explained each of your sources – providing sufficient context. I think that your conclusion could use a few more sentences but that you summed your thoughts up nicely. You could mention more about the two sides of Obamacare in your introductory paragraph in order to provide some information and context before you lay out evidence of negativity from your Twitter source. I didn’t write this on your paper so I will say it here: I am not the best at English, so take everything I say with a grain of salt. I did ask my amazing roommate about capitalization though a...

I thought you did a good job at explaining what each source is in general and analyzing all parts of each source. I think that overall you appropriately addressed the prompt/task we were assigned. I tried to highlight some parts I liked by writing a compliment as a comment. I think the conclusion and introduction could use one or two more sentences to sum up what you want to know or what you want to prove and then the overarching results of your analysis - what you learned, or again proved. I thought you chose a great topic and talked about Twitter very well. One suggestion I have is that you vary your word choice. You used a lot of good vocabulary but some words became repetitive. I have certain words that I know I use a lot like “shows” and “trying” so when I am basically done with my paper I do *Ctrl F* so I can search for those words in my paper and highlight them. Then I use a thesaurus and go back and figure what synonyms fit best in each sentence containing one of the w...

             Everything in moderation? On April 26th, sixteen-year-old Davis Allen Cripe collapsed during art class and was pronounced dead in the hospital just over an hour later. The cause? Too much caffeine in too little time. Cripe ingested one McDonald’s latte, one large Diet Mountain Dew, and one energy drink over a two-hour period and it killed him. (Lynch) Energy drink risks are discussed worldwide across the internet and through the media in the forms of both positive and negative responses. I am going to analyze how the issue of energy drinks is publicized across a variety of sources, from formal to informal, including pages from a scientific journal, an article on NBC News, and a Red Bull energy drink advertisement as well as compare each medium’s message and rhetorical features. Lynch, Jamiel and Goldschmidt, Debra, “ Teen dies from too much caffeine, coroner says.” CNN , 16 May 2017, http://www.cnn.com/2017/05/15/health/teen...

Section 1: Bibliographic Entry:   Reuters. “Energy Drinks Worse for Your Heart Than Caffeine Alone: Study.” NBCNews , 26 Apr. 2017, www.nbcnews.com/health/health-news/energy-drinks-worse-your-heart-caffeine- alone-study-n751686. Accessed 5 Sept. 2017. Section 2: Summary :   The author’s primary claim is that energy drinks have harmful, possibly fatal consequences. Therefore, they should not be consumed by anyone, especially adolescents. Energy drink popularity and number of emergency room visits related to its consumption have a direct relationship - each have continued to rise. The author debunks the argument that energy drinks and caffeine are the same, citing a lack of proper evidence. Therefore, it is implied that the - often unlabeled - high caffeine content in these drinks is not the only concern. The mix of ingredients that make up most energy drinks are likely to blame for things such as irregularities in heart EKG (electrocardiogram) readings seen in per...

Section 1: Bibliographic Entry:   Alford, Chris, et al. “The Effects of Red Bull Energy Drink on Human Performance and Mood.” Amino Acids , vol. 21, no. 2, Sept. 2001, pp. 139–150, doi:https://doi.org/10.1007/s007260170021. Accessed 5 Sept. 2017. Section 2: Summary :   This reading is a formal report involving the statistical analyses from three various studies involving a commonly-known energy drink: Red Bull. Although this source is primarily informational and therefore does not have a specific purpose or opinion on the issue of energy drink risks, the discussion at the end of the entry concludes that the three studies mentioned consistently showed Red Bull has statistically significant positive effects both physically and mentally. Conclusions for statistical tests that involve observations are difficult to interpret and understand. This is because the results cannot prove anything or qualify the cause and effect of caffeine on performance, since one of the oth...